Mi tarea de inglés

Ya que estoy metida en el Británico, para estrenar el blog publicaré una de las composiciones que me mandaron a hacer a ver qué les parece. No me critiquen por la oración inicial porque la tenía que usar sí o sí. El tema es algo trillado pero es de la vida real, le sucedió a mi amacita. Si no saben inglés... pues qué pena pe. That day, my life changed forever. At the beginning I was a young girl studying Education just because I had to use my time doing something. My only goal was to have a decent job so that I could leave home and survive. One night, while I was sleeping, I found it really hard to breathe. Then I couldn't feel my body and all the room was freezing. I immediately thought, ' I'm dying. ' I was just 18 years old. All I could think about was my dog, but I knew my sister would take care of him. I stopped struggling, I stopped trying to breathe and let my body go. That was shen I felt like I no longer had a body and a heavy wind was pulling me up from the back, just like a vaccum cleaner. Everything was black around me, just darkness all around. I wasn't scared though, I was really calm and relaxed. Then I thought, ' This must be death, I'm dead. ' Suddenly, I fell into a yellow light. The light was so bright I thought I could do blind. I felt like floating, like and astronaut, even though I had no body at all. I felt protected by this warm light, secure, with no fears. Then, out of the blue, I heard a voice inside my head, it said, ' You shouldn't be here. You still have a lot to do. You have to go back and serve, you have been born to serve others. ' Then the light disappeared. Eventually, I managed to open my eyes. Everything was different, everything felt different. From that moment I started to like my career. I began to look at the people with more human eyes. It definitely changed me. Now I live my life to the fullest, enjoying every moment of it. You never know what's going to happen the next hour or even in the next 10 minutes, or if you're going to still be here.